i Register
In some senses, showy is marked as derogatory, informal. Watch for register when choosing this word.
adj
Calling attention; flashy; standing out to the eye.
Making a striking or aesthetically pleasing display.
showy flowers
Inclined to showing (by conveying an impression so that events are described in the narrative), instead of telling (by explicitly stating facts).
I think my problem with it is that it's a) a little "telly" not "showy" in comparison to the rest […]
There's a way to make this more showy and less telly. It's like you're in a hurry to get on with the rest of the story.